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« on: January 23, 2008, 01:21:03 am »
Why do we do this?
Why do we accept our fate?
Why do we smile?
And pretend everything is alright?

It's not like we believe it.
It's not as if we can't see the pain,
we are causing to the world.
But we still say we're fine

There is something I haven't told you.
There are a thousand things I havent told you!
We can make it better.
We can fix it all.
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Dream, there is alot to be said for dreams, even if theres is no chance it will come true. There is comfort in the knowledge you can still dream of it. Nothing great was acomplished without detailed planning, no plan was ever drawn up without a dream of an acomplishment. They did not build the apollo rockets until after man dreamed of reaching out and touching the stars. How? How is irrelevant, as long as there is a why, and the why can be simply "I want to!", the how will be worked out later.

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« Reply #1 on: January 23, 2008, 07:34:53 am »
k good spelling, petty good grammar also. I like the poem overall, the first 2 verses work well, the third verse doesn't scan quite right, but i think that helps make it work. Well done, will I be seeing anymore of your work soon?
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AMERICA here I come,
I will be out of the country - and away from internet - for the next 2-3 weeks.

A journey of a thousand miles starts with a single step,
A story of a thousand words starts with a single thought.
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