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« on: October 26, 2007, 09:40:41 pm »

Well, I have to be another voice in the chorus and say that all's well. You do use the cliches a bit, but there's enough in there that tells the reader you know it's a cliche ("Zombies. I should have known.").
The change in setting from the city to the house is dramatic, and better have some good explaining Tongue. I can just tell this is leading up to something big, though, so lead on!
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