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Some poems i wrote...

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« on: December 18, 2008, 12:51:43 pm »



He sprinted in crying..
He could be dying…
A cough and a splutter…
A cringe and a shudder…
Appeared in a dash…
Maybe a rash??
Germs and the sick…
Go get help quick!
Kicking and screaming…
Hopelessly bleeding!
The dangerously ill…
Life almost nil…
A deadly disease!
It was only…..a sneeze   

This is the only one that ticks with me, but I like it. All apart from the first line. I can't help but think there should be a comma.
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He sprinted in, crying..
But that aside it's.... fun.

ps. Please also excuse the late reply and lack of ideas for names.
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